User talk:Fswe1/A Temple Devoured

Very enjoyable thus far, with two things bugging me...

1 - The insanity of Amascut is really poorly done. Just seeing people die is definently not enough - she needs to see some large0scale destruction. I suggest that while the Mahjarrat are with Ama and Itchlarin, that someone or something attacks them. The Mahjarrat go crazy on it, and actually destroy part of her temple. In a rage, Amascut attacks one of them, but they easily defeat her, which drives her mad.

2 - WHY WE NO GET TO GO INTO TEMPLE?

Otherwise, awesome. Plus, it not only seems like it will tie up some loose ends I've left in my plotting, but also fits what I'm doing!

05:20, September 17, 2012 (UTC)