RuneScape:Featured articles/Barrows (delist)

Barrows
The article is completely unreferenced, the coverage is poor, and the writing and organization of the article could be improved. I'll give some examples below.
 * Background
 * Why is the image relevant to this article?
 * "It succeeded, for the brothers, who were in the front line, seemed invincible." Poor grammar.
 * "The brothers were grievously wounded in battle near the Great Vyrewall and thus the army set up camp just west of Meiyerditch." The prose could be improved. This would work better: "After the brothers were grievously wounded in battle near the Great Vyrewall, the army set up camp just west of Meiyerditch."
 * "Soon, the brothers died of their infectious wounds simultaneously in the army's camp." The brothers died at precisely the same time? That sounds unlikely; I would recommend referencing this claim if it is true.
 * "Sliske cast a magical spell on the crypts" What crypts?
 * "binding them to guard a very powerful artefact" The name of this artefact could be mentioned. I notice that in the article, "a very powerful artefact" links to the Barrows icon.
 * Explain who Zaros is. Why did they Azzanadra want to establish communication with Zaros?
 * "Shortly after said ritual, which the adventurer attended with several Temple Knight allies, Sliske attempted to claim them in a similar way." In what way did Azzandra and the adventurer claim them in the first place?
 * "However, the Saradominist priest Akrisae Kolluym intercepted the spell, sacrificing himself and turning him into Akrisae the Doomed - the seventh wight." This sentence is a bit convoluted, and needs to indicate that Sliske turned him into Akrisae the Doomed.
 * "Akrisae joined the Barrows Brothers in their crypt, although, of course, he isn't a Barrows Brother himself." It isn't necessary to mention Akrisea is not a Barrows brother (I hope).


 * Other quick observations
 * The lead mentions the objective of the Barrows minigame, but this isn't mentioned or expanded on in the body.
 * Money making: An introduction to this section would be useful.
 * This section talks about "High level Barrows", but this isn't mentioned anywhere else in the article.
 * "The minigame is one of a few being updated completely, both graphically and minigame obstacles." Poor grammar. Also, this could be included in the "Graphical overhaul" section.
 * "Safespots were also affected by the update, and there are very few safespots to deal with the Barrows Brothers, all being in the catacombs only." These safespots aren't described anywhere else in the article. Smithing (talk &#124; contribs) 02:44, September 16, 2013 (UTC)